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Thanks to Jennifer Eaton’s blog, I discovered the most vile word in the English language. In my comment on her post, I said, “I hate you, in the nicest possible way,” for pointing out the word.
You thought you hated me before, but wait until you get a load of this.
How could a two-letter word destroy a writer in one afternoon? Here’s how. I found 539 of the cheeky buggers in my manuscript. 539!!! I kid you not. So far, I edited out 64 of the offending words and I’m only on page 52. The result? The writing is stronger.
I know you are all dancing on your toes and asking, “What is it? What is it?”
You answered the question yourself. The bloody word it “IT.”
How could “IT” be so bad? Let me explain. When we reference something in our writing, say a purse, we are loath to use the word again in the same sentence, or one following closely behind. For example:
I put my purse on my shoulder and IT made my neck hurt.
We avoid writing the word purse twice so we use the word “it.” But the “it” can be referred to in other ways.
When I put my heavy purse on my shoulder, the strap dug into my neck.”
Or,
I put my purse on my shoulder and the weight sent a sharp pang up my neck.
Or,
When I walked out of the pub, the weight of my purse caused me to hold my neck at a weird angle. My husband said I looked tipsy.
Get “it?” I mean ~ Do you understand what I mean? When you read the word “IT,” ask yourself, “What is the “IT?”
Here is an example from my manuscript:
Original copy:
The funeral ended with “Somewhere Over the Rainbow.” To this day, the song gives me chills. If you listen intently to the words you will know what I mean. IT is sad and soothing at the same time.
Revised copy:
The funeral ended with “Somewhere Over the Rainbow.” To this day, the song gives me chills. If you listen intently to the words you will know what I mean. The lyrics are sad, but soothing.
Of course you can’t, nor shouldn’t, get rid of every “it.” It serves a purpose. And, you don’t want to go overboard and sound silly:
I put my purse on my shoulder. I carry my wallet and lipstick in a device with a history dates back to biblical times.
When you do “Seek and Destroy” to look for “it,” don’t forget that “it” can hide as “it,” it.” and “it’s”
For advice on other words that sneak into your writing, clink on the links below:
▪ I Have a Problem with “That”
▪ Sneaky Little Words for the word GOT
▪ Strong vs Weak Words for the word WENT
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 2 for the word PEOPLE
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 3 for the words THING and STUFF
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 4 for the words GO and GOING
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 5 for the words ALWAYS and NEVER
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 6 for the words PRETTY, SURE, and CERTAIN
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 7 for the word HAD and HAVE
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 8 for the word JUST
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 9 for the word ALL
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 10 for INDEFINITE NUMBERS
▪ Strong vs Weak Words – Part 11 for the word USE
- Strong vs Weak Words – Part 12 for the word CAN
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I’m catching up on your blog today and have created another page with your tips. IT is a killer for me. I’ve searched and found a LOT than need to be dealt with. Swiftly 😉
IT did me in. However, I am pleased with the difference. Good luck to you in your battle with IT.
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Personally, I think “hate” is one of the vilest words in the English language. I sometimes write it but always catch myself and change it to something like “I do’t like” or “I despise” or “I’m not a fan”………..
I hope you don’t hate, not like, despise me. I hope you ARE a fan!
When will you be done? I’ve had to unearth the USB stick out of my handbag, open up Robin’s tips and add yet another word I know I’m guilty of over using. What I really hate about it, is automatically I type it’s even if it should be the possessive its… and it slips through so many annoying times. You’re a great virtual mentor, thank God I don’t have to pay for your wide-ranging wisdom.
Ha ha! I have dozens more of these bad boys in the wings. What a minute. What do you mean “not pay me?” Your bill is in the mail.
So glad you found these tips helpful. So glad.
I hear you. It is hiding everywhere, on every page. I didn’t know. Thanks for pointing out the critter.
Damn thing. IT is evil. Who knew?
Yes, you picked the perfect picture for this post because “IT” Just goes so well with this post, I’ve got a lot more editing to do now. These post are really helpful by the way.
Isn’t he cute. Well, I used to think Cousin Itt is cute until I discovered he is a four-letter word. I guess he is a two-letter word, but you know what I mean.
You have turned me into a psychopathic, paranoid writer. I am on the edge of my seat ready to pounce on every weak word I find, my finger quivering above the backspace button. I. Must. Kill. Weak. Words.
Oh, you made me laugh out loud. But I hope you mean I turned you into a psychopathic paranoid in the nicest possible way. Or, are you coming after me with a knife?
Next, I will address your overuse of periods. Tee hee!
Not fishing for compliments here, but has this series been helpful? That totally sounds like “fishing” but I am interested. I know how much the things I’ve written about improved my writing. I wonder if others are finding the same thing.
Very helpful for me! I’m keeping a checklist of all of them for both current and future novels. 🙂
That is great to hear! I worry about sounding preachy, or like a smarty-pants. But discovering these weak words, and then eliminating them from my manuscript has made such a difference. The darn process also sends me back to the editing dungeon more times than I would like.
I have a check list too, but now when I type the word “IT,” alarms go off in my head and wake the neighbors. They are rather cross.
Uh, if you’re asking whether turning writers against you is helpful then I’m afraid you’re outta luck, haha
No, in all seriousness, I really found this helpful. I can also see by the heavy comment load that others find it helpful.
I would actually compare your series to the great writing book The Elements of Style by Strunk & White (ouch, watch that head of yours, it’s getting in my way!) because you get to the heart of the matter and you don’t lose me with a lot of unnecessary jargon.
If you’re thinking that now you should compile all your lessons into a tidy pocket-sized handbook and sell it, then yes, you should be thinking it and I would expect a free, autographed copy for handing you this brilliant idea.
I am speechless and that is a rare thing for me. You also moved me to tears. That is not so rare. I am flattered beyond belief and grateful to you for saying such kind words. Can I give you a virtual hug? Wow. I am so moved. My hat no longer fits, but boy, the pressure is on.
Comparing my advice to Strunk and White might have them spinning in their graves, but your words have me dancing on the table.
I am considering turning this series into a slim volume and you, my sweet friend, will receive a case of autographed copies. I will deliver them personally. I’ll also bring flowers, dinner, and a bottle of wine. What else would you like? A new Mercedes? Blue or taupe?
Thank you darling Kate. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
You are quite welcome my dear! Mercedes-Shmercedes. One day I would just love to meet you personally. 🙂
Oops, I used ‘just’ in my sentence but I’m keeping the damn word because I really mean ‘just’! 🙂
I keep using “just” too, because sometimes you just have to say “just!” “Just” not too often!
I would love to meet you too. I am thinking about attending the Writer’s Digest Conference in Los Angeles this year. Any chance you are? If you are, I can bring your Mercedes to LA and we can drive it to Beverly Hills for dinner at Maestros. My favorite steak place ever.
Haha! That would be heavenly! I live in NH and a trip to LA is something I have to save up for, like a year in advance! I went to the one they hosted in NY 2 Januarys ago, and although that was still a fortune, it was cheaper for me overall.
But, maybe next year…? 🙂
Was it worth the money? Did you enjoy it? Have “take-aways?”
Quite a difference!
Isn’t “IT?”
😀
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Sometimes, (I dare to be contrary), using “it” in a sentence helps to keep it shorter, something I really need to do. On the other hand, I do love Cousin IT.
Puts my head on the keys and weeps. Weeps I tell you.
I’m sorry darling. I’m sorry. I’ll come over and help weed out the “its.” No wait. I still have 4 million of my own to deal with.
Thousands of its swiming in my brain. I feel like the crew of Alien. “get it out, get it out
Ha Ha! I wish you could hear how I just laughed out loud. My outburst startled the neighbors and the birds freaked out. Alfred Hitchcock-esque.
It’s absolutely necessary for a writer to have an excellent laugh that can scare birds. On bugger, I used it’s
I love the humour you put into these posts. Takes the edge off the work ahead.
I’m glad you think I’m funny, not a smarty-pants.
Excellent thoughts as always.
Well thank you! How nice of you to say.
I never though about ‘it’ before, but I will now 🙂
Changing out the “its” made the sentences much richer. I can’t believe that a simple change like that could make such a difference.
Yay! Attack that “it” with ruthless abandon! Your novel will be a stronger place.
And please stop hating me. I’m getting a complex 🙂
Glad I could be helpful!
Oh darlin’ I LOVE you!
Yay! Feeling all cuddly inside again!
Phew. Me too. NOW, I’m off to nuke “it” some more.
That is a great point. I never want to use the same word twice in one sentence or back to back. This is an excellent point I will take into my own point. I’ve thought about it before, but not as in depth. I like the picture, also!
Whoa! Don’t know how I missed your comment so sorry for the delay in responding. Alarms go off in my head when I type the word “IT” now. Cousin Itt was a cutie!
You have me thinking more now especially as I begin my summer of editing. I’ve completed a lot of writing, which has to be edited. Most writing I do is short, short. I find myself picking out those annoying words; those bad habbits like little prepositions we don’t need. My client’s book is in first person. I find myself trying to pick out the one gizzillion “me” and “my.” I is not as big of a problem, because I’ve tried from the beginning to circumvent “it.” 🙂
Hmmm…my book is in the first person too. Can you give us an example of how you would NOT use me or my?
Also, when you say client’s book, are you an editor or an agent? If you are, REPRESENT ME BOOK. Kidding. (Not really.)
Of course, as soon as I made the “ME BOOK” typo above, my computer froze and I had to restart. I am leaving “ME BOOK” instead of correcting it to say “MY BOOK” because I like how the typo makes me sound like a have an Irish brogue.
The word “it” is my nemesis!
“It” is mine too, NOW!
My biggest problem with “it” in any form is that so often you can’t tell what the “it” is supposed to refer to. But I do like your Cousin Itt photo.
After looking at the one-millionth “it,” I had the hang of “it.” It took practice but now, every time I type the word “it” alarms go off around me.
It’s just another one of those things that I’ve got to find a way to get out of my manuscript…. Have I used enough weak works, or can I add some more? 🙂
Ha ha! Brilliant. You can add more if you like, but this is dandy!
Yeah, it was horrible for me too – 129 instances in a 10k manuscript. SO much better without ‘it’!
Yup. “IT” is a horrible word. ARGH!
Hi,
A great thought finding a photo of cousin Itt, brilliant. 🙂
My husband thought of it. He is a brilliant guy!
I have a ton of words, like “that”, for instance. I have to edit out bunches every time I proofread.
“That” was my first epiphany. “That” caused me to wonder if there were other innocuous words I overused. Yup. There were. Hence, this series.
Well, glad I’m not in the boat alone.
And we are paddling as fast as we can, right?
As I recall, when we walked out of the pub we were indeed tipsy! Your purse had nothing to do with IT !! 🙂
Shhhh . . . you weren’t supposed to tell anyone.
Yes, now you are the hated one. ; ) I’m going to have to write, then go back and amend all of the “it”s. I’m afraid I will find as many of them as I have of “just”s. Argh.
Trust me. You will find WAY more “its” than “justs.”